Based on the ideas from our brainstorm of what should occur in our opening sequence, we decided that we like the idea of a diary being found and narrating events in the past, but having some kind of parallel to the present. The diary entry that is read over the top of the scene had to set up enigmas and add to the suspense of the scene. This is what we has in mind for the diary entry.
I fear I have been followed. If anyone ever finds this and if something happens to me, please, reader, you must stop the (hidden) from hiding the truth forever. For the sake of all that is human, you must reveal everything.
They're here.'
Script Draft
INT. HIDEOUT, PITCH BLACK, CELLAR, 1989
DAVID lights candle. He picks it up, start to light up walls, looking at symbols on the wall, gets out a diary and pencil.
EXT. FOREST, EVENING, PRESENT DAY
CLARA walking through forest with a map, page and photo, looking at them, finding here way to the abandoned building.
DAVID (narration):
April 7th, 1989. After hunting and searching for months, finally I have found it, and in good time too...
CLARA approaches and enters the building.
INT. HIDEOUT, PITCH BLACK, CELLAR, 1989
DAVID writing in diary, by candlelight, on floor.
DAVID (narration) Cont.:
...the followers seem to have been getting closer to stopping me. Desmond's hideout appears to have been abandoned for quite a while.
Behind DAVID, mysterious figures rushes past for a split second, strange noise heard. David looks around, thinks it's nothing, continues to write.
INT. HIDEOUT, EVENING TIME, CELLAR, PRESENT DAY
CLARA rustles around bag, gets out torch. She shines torch about just looking around at first, then notices symbols, crouches, appears to study them in detail.
INT. HIDEOUT, PITCH BLACK, CELLAR, 1989
DAVID, looking around some more with the candle, discovers a map crumpled in the corner, squinting as he looks closely at it, starts to write some more in the diary, excitedly.
DAVID (narration) Cont.:
It's hard to make things out with candlelight, but the findings seem greater than I had ever perceived. This, changes, everything. Finally we just might be able to understand what happened during the missing days!
DAVID, hears more noises, like creeks, muffled wind noise. Score intensifies. Point of view of David looking around, moving forward, waving candle about. It extinguishes and he rushes to his matches to quickly light it again, panicky sounds under his breath.
INT. HIDEOUT, EVENING TIME, CELLAR, PRESENT DAY
CLARA, finds matches and box on the floor, noises can start to be heard in the background, she looks around, then continues to search about, shines the torch around the room some more. She stumbles upon a candle on the floor. Picks it up and holds it in front of the torchlight, studying it.
INT. HIDEOUT, PITCH BLACK, CELLAR, 1989
DAVID holding the candle in the same position, panicking, waving the candle about, looking for his follower. Quickly he whips out the diary again, in a rush writing.
CLARA stumbles across the diary on the floor, she picks it up carefully. She gets out the page she had and finds where it was ripped out. She starts to read, looking concerned.
INT. HIDEOUT, PITCH BLACK, CELLAR, 1989
DAVID holding the candle in the same position, panicking, waving the candle about, looking for his follower. Quickly he whips out the diary again, in a rush writing.
DAVID (narration) Cont.:
I fear I have been followed.
INT. HIDEOUT, EVENING TIME, CELLAR, PRESENT DAY
CLARA stumbles across the diary on the floor, she picks it up carefully. She gets out the page she had and finds where it was ripped out. She starts to read, looking concerned.
DAVID (narration) Cont.:
If I get caught then no one will ever know of the missing days events, and all of humankind will be in danger.
Noises behind CLARA. She knows she has been followed, looks shocked. She runs out the hideout, pack her things in her bag in the process.
EXT. FOREST/PARK, EVENING TIME, PRESENT DAY
CLARA is seen running away in terror from the building, looking back to see her pursuer.
INT. HIDEOUT, PITCH BLACK, CELLAR, 1989
DAVID knows the antagonist is right behind him, they are seen over DAVID'S shoulder. He writes one last thing at a steady pace. He then shuts the book in his hand and slowly turns around. He looks in shock, and lets go of the diary, dropping it to the floor. The antagonist steps towards him, this time seen up close.
DAVID (narration) Cont.:
They're here.
EXT. FOREST/PARK, EVENING TIME, PRESENT DAY
CLARA still running. The pursuer is seen following her, chasing CLARA at a slightly slower speed. CLARA drops her bag. She stops running and turns and looks at both the bag and the pursuer, unsure if she should attempt to retrieve it. She leaps for it, but the pursuer reaches her, the score reaches a dramatic climax as we look at the pursuer looming over CLARA. Cuts to black. Film title over black.
By Dario Feddersen-Doyle and David Ziolkowski
By Dario Feddersen-Doyle and David Ziolkowski
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